Wednesday, November 4, 2015

Week 5.2 Journal Responses

Q1: Overall, I’m pretty satisfied with me WP2 compared with my WP1. I put in a lot of work with trying to incorporate the course readings and quotes directly from the articles. I struggled a little bit with trying to blend in all the information together to make it flow smoothly, and I tried to not to sound redundant. I also had a problem with keeping it within a 6 page limit.

Q2: The two comments that I received yesterday that were the most helpful was to make my thesis arguable and add more analysis to my arguments/statements, which I worked on that night. Compared to previous papers, I needed to explain and analyze my claims thoroughly to make it clear for the audience to understand. Also, I had to go back to my thesis multiple times and revise it, so it can tie in with the whole paper.

3 comments:

  1. I had the same problem trying to keep it within a 6 page limit! But I decided it was better to have too much information as opposed to not enough, even though I had to "pick and choose" my battles as De Piero said. I also got the comment about making my thesis more arguable. I think it's a good piece of advice because it helps you revise the most important part of your essay!

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  2. I had the same problem with making my paper fit the page limit! It's cool that you were willing to try the "working thesis" thing and I bet that made your writing a lot more cohesive.

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  3. I felt the same way you did on question one. I had a hard time with the page limit, and finding quotes that worked with my topic. Also, I had a hard time with my thesis too. I was trying to tie in my topic with my thesis and I just didn't know how to do it. However, from the way you sound in this post I bet you did a great job.

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